(80's pop) song called second chances critique please

[gritz]

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[robussc]

I like it a lot, but I think it needs some work on the arrangement. I don’t get much of a “story” from the track, if that makes any sense? There’s no bridge that would seem to be the place to add the “second chance” contrast? And I think the track could build more to the finale. There’s too much going on from the get go.

Hope that’s useful, because musically it’s very pleasing.

[jappe]

I hear a nice vibe. I like the breakdown parts at 0:55, 1:30 and 2:26.
I agree with robussc about the "story" part. I'd like to hear a variant of this where there's more progression and small things catching my attention.

[bitley]

I hear no vocals! It needs vocals. The piano is somehow detached from the mix a bit.

[gritz]

Thanks guys much appreciated- I will amend accordingly