I Wandered Lonely as a Cloud - Synth Rock - words by William Wordsworth

[Tincture]

https://soundcloud.com/tincture-1/i-wan ... as-a-cloud



Music by me, words by William Wordsworth (1770-1850) >> = My adaptation
       >
          The waves beside them danced; but they
          Out-did the sparkling waves in glee:
          A poet could not but be gay,
          In such a jocund company:
          I gazed--and gazed--but little thought
          What wealth the show to me had brought:

          For oft, when on my couch I lie
          In vacant or in pensive mood,                               20
          They flash upon that inward eye
          Which is the bliss of solitude;
          And then my heart with pleasure fills,
          And dances with the daffodils. > Often when on my couch I lie
          In vacant or in pensive mood
          They flush upon that inward eye
          Which is the bliss of solitude

          And then my heart with pleasure fills
          And dances with the daffodils

[Soft Enerji]

vox fx is great......rhythmically it maybe doesn't quite sit right in places but the overall vibe is way cool! Nice one!

Mark

[jappe]

I liked this!

There's so much inspiration to gain from poetry. 
Personally I'm on a route to make music inspired by the poetry of William Blake.

[Tincture]

Thanks guys I was in two minds whether to upload or not but thought its charm outweighed its frailties. I know the timing sucks in lots of ways, so thanks for seeing past that! I did my best, I just wish the tools such as copy groove, ReGroove, shuffle etc were available for audio. I really could have done with getting a beat groove and applying it to audio here

[Tincture]

One bump for the inward eye.

[JNeffLind]

This has a cool vibe, especially with the juxtaposition of the classical lyric poetry with the vox effect and synthy sounds. I agree though that the rhythm makes it harder to appreciate. Would it be possible to maybe just do an automation in your volume lane for the audio so that the first and third beat of every measure the vox is emphasized more. (Loud enough to be noticeable, but not loud enough that the other stuff fades too far back). Then the sort of polyrhythm thing you seem to be leaning towards might fit better and not take a lazy listener out of the groove. (If this sounds like a lot of work, you can just draw in a couple bars worth of automation, then copy and paste.) Not sure if you like the idea or how it'd sound, but it might be worth a try. Either way, you're right that it has it's charms, though imperfect. Thanks for sharing. 

[Tincture]

Yes I like the idea. Definitely worth a try, thanks.

[mbfrancis]

Love this, very creative.  Love the music, too.  A couple of ideas:

* I wish the beat punched more, could just be volume.
* When the vocal drops, the whole track dies - I'd boost something or bring another part to keep the energy level up.
* Up until the end, when it rocks a bit, the vibe + arrangement doesn't really change - I'd keep adding parts so it keeps building until the end and then explodes and rocks out.  Needs more dynamics.

Just ideas, disregard if you want.  Cool stuff.

[Tincture]

Love this, very creative.  Love the music, too.  A couple of ideas:

* I wish the beat punched more, could just be volume.
* When the vocal drops, the whole track dies - I'd boost something or bring another part to keep the energy level up.
* Up until the end, when it rocks a bit, the vibe + arrangement doesn't really change - I'd keep adding parts so it keeps building until the end and then explodes and rocks out.  Needs more dynamics.

Just ideas, disregard if you want.  Cool stuff.

Good ideas they are too, thanks. The arrangement is a bit monotone. Love your music and sound

[mbfrancis]

Good ideas they are too, thanks. The arrangement is a bit monotone. Love your music and sound

 
Wow, thanks, Tincture!