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12 Feb 2015

JiggeryPokery wrote:That was too complex
I lost count on the fourth line
And now my brain hurts
There once was a man from Nantucket
Who took a pig in a thicket to fuck it...

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12 Feb 2015


I hope that we will keep on writing words
Since they are golden keys to someone's mind
They fly to find your heart like seeker birds
The pleasure is the best that one can find

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13 Feb 2015

Shall I wander as lost as a lamb
through Chorley town center
to see the salesman,
to purchase a trinket for a maiden fair
with cherry red lips and honey blonde hair?
Shall I take up my chance and use what I've saved
to buy her that one thing that she surely must crave?
Shall I go for a haircut and have a close shave?
Shall I iron a shirt?
Would I be so brave?
Shall I go get some condoms or is that pushing my luck?
Shall I get of my arse?...well...shall I fuck.

Happy Valentines day to all the single people who don't even have to bathe tomorrow. :)
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13 Feb 2015

jappe wrote: Thank's.
You inspired me to try making an English Sonnet.
After battling ABAB for...too long, I decided to stop there.

My world is fading right before my eyes
I witness once again the fall of Rome
My spark is scared of dark and cries then dies
And then the Reaper came to take me home


Would be interesting to practice sonnets. Amusing puzzles.

BTW if you see something gramatically wrong, "too odd" phrasing or something violating all known poetic conventions, excluding Vogonic,  please let me know:-)


JNeffLind wrote:
Hey man. You've got your iambic Pentameter and rhyming perfect. Second stanza:

My world is shrinking down to smaller size.
By perch afforded hung from astral dome.
A birds eye view on all that floats and flies.
To spot the jealous gems and crumbling chrome.

Hello, third stanza delivery:

But countless are the worlds that I can see,
When birds eye range extends with optic mind
I see it now so clear, my eyes are free
My time on earth was sweet, but oh, so blind.



(BTW what does the phrase "by perch afforded" mean? I'm thinking "someone went out fishing, but got no perch and bought it from the market instead" lol.)

EDIT: ...and the interesting Haiku contribution here inspired me now to google on "Haiku for idiots". Let's see if I can make something haiku like...


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14 Feb 2015

jappe wrote:


(BTW what does the phrase "by perch afforded" mean? I'm thinking "someone went out fishing, but got no perch and bought it from the market instead" lol.)

EDIT: ...and the interesting Haiku contribution here inspired me now to google on "Haiku for idiots". Let's see if I can make something haiku like...
By perch afforded meant by benefit of the location at the top of the sky. You're right that perch is a fish. It is also a verb for what a bird does when it lands, and something can be said to "afford" a view of another thing. The phrase is sort of an archaic sounding poeticism like one would find a knight say in a tale of chivalry.

Haikus are as good or (more usually) bad as their writers. They're the training wheels of "metered" poetry except for when they're super beautiful. Then they're just super beautiful.

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14 Feb 2015

jappe wrote:
But countless are the worlds that I can see,
When birds eye range extends with optic mind
I see it now so clear, my eyes are free
My time on earth was sweet, but oh, so blind.

Normally we'd have three quatrains and then a couplet. So here's a couplet:

Asleep I walk towards comfort's quest of night
Though darkness clouds my every drop of light

Team sonnet.  :s0801:

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14 Feb 2015

Time ticks slowly here,
Jump up there, it's faster I hear
Time has run out for me,
One too many beats of my heart you see

Now I am nothing but mush,
They crowd around my headstone and push
The reason is that they can still see,
All that I left behind, they want to be me

If they knew the loneliness and guilt,
They'd let my bones gather their silt
But people clamour for stars that don't fade,
Hoping to take themselves past life's small parade

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14 Feb 2015

PUF Deactivated
Propellerheads don't care
Unimpressed by Discover
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15 Feb 2015

jappe wrote:
But countless are the worlds that I can see,
When birds eye range extends with optic mind
I see it now so clear, my eyes are free
My time on earth was sweet, but oh, so blind.

JNeffLind wrote:
Normally we'd have three quatrains and then a couplet. So here's a couplet:

Asleep I walk towards comfort's quest of night
Though darkness clouds my every drop of light

Team sonnet.  :s0801:

Bravo:-)

Thank's for the cooperation, I had fun doing this!
I need to read up on English poetry; and I also think I actually need to read more English literature (perhaps with "old" language) to get a feeling for alternative and more subtle ways of expressing oneself in poetry.

And to get it all in one place:


My world is fading right before my eyes
I witness once again the fall of Rome
My spark is scared of dark and cries then dies
And then the Reaper came to take me home
 
My world is shrinking down to smaller size.
By perch afforded hung from astral dome.
A birds eye view on all that floats and flies.
To spot the jealous gems and crumbling chrome.
 
But countless are the worlds that I can see,
When birds eye range extends with optic mind
I see it now so clear, my eyes are free
My time on earth was sweet, but oh, so blind.
 
Asleep I walk towards comfort's quest of night
Though darkness clouds my every drop of light
 

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14 Jan 2016

Resurrecting this thread with some words about L

Many people yell,
at the fucking letter L
Fuckin' L, Fuckin' L!
WHY? Can anyone tell?

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16 Jan 2016

CaliforniaBurrito wrote:What Happens Yesterday

Lots of caffeine for thoughts to unfurl
Erotica vibes after too many beers
Balancing humor of being so twirled
Time to get back with pleasing my ears

Three in a row is making me crazy
Passing the torch to those who are lazy

(...ok...I'm done)

:crazy: :silent: :crazy:
Bravo! This thread came alive again :thumbs_up:

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16 Jan 2016

[double post...because of the confusing experience when trying to post with the micro GUI on my micro phone]

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16 Jan 2016

Void.
Void. Light.
Void...

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16 Jan 2016

tt_lab wrote:Void.
Void. Light.
Void...
Tasty burrito
Won't survive a crowded room
Don't forget the sauce

:-o :-o :-o :-o :-o :-o :-o

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11 Mar 2016

The rays and the realm

A mere shadow of the past
slipped through time and made my shade
dancing sunrays came to aid
the dark realm broke free at last
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16 Mar 2016

OK this one is in German:

Die Hummel fliegt
Tagein Tagaus
und sammelt ihren
Honigschmaus

Am Fluss entlang
geradeaus
Niemals denkt sie
an das Aus

Ein ganzes
Hummelleben lang
spürt sie weder
Sorg noch Bang

Vorbei sie fliegt
am Galgenstrang
an dem
der Hurenmörder hang


It roughly translates like this :

The Bumblebee flies every day
collecting Honey as her prey

Along the river straight ahead
Never thinking of her death

A whole Life long she feels no grief
feels no fear and no belief

She flies past the gallows rope
where the whores Killer lost his hope


The meaning is not exactly the same as I tried to keep it a rhyme. I know its kind a strange but I like it :)

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16 Mar 2016

TheMiles wrote:
The meaning is not exactly the same as I tried to keep it a rhyme. I know its kind a strange but I like it :)
A good poem, and very nice translation to the English version as well!
I'm thinking that it should be "Nektarschmaus" instead of "Honigschmaus" though? Or can the word "schmaus" refer to the nektar ingredient in Honey?

I like how you start with the simple life of the humble bee and create a contrast with the twist at the end.
It leaves me with a special feeling afterwards, and that's how I define a good poem.

It also makes me think of another poem, by William Blake: A Dream: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/A_Dream_(Blake)
...which inspired me to use it as lyrics for a simple cheesy tune with me and a friend singing, neither of us very well though so pitch correction was heavily used:-)
And it is here: https://instaud.io/l8D

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jappe wrote:
TheMiles wrote:
The meaning is not exactly the same as I tried to keep it a rhyme. I know its kind a strange but I like it :)
A good poem, and very nice translation to the English version as well!
I'm thinking that it should be "Nektarschmaus" instead of "Honigschmaus" though? Or can the word "schmaus" refer to the nektar ingredient in Honey?

I like how you start with the simple life of the humble bee and create a contrast with the twist at the end.
It leaves me with a special feeling afterwards, and that's how I define a good poem.

It also makes me think of another poem, by William Blake: A Dream: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/A_Dream_(Blake)
...which inspired me to use it as lyrics for a simple cheesy tune with me and a friend singing, neither of us very well though so pitch correction was heavily used:-)
And it is here: https://instaud.io/l8D
Thanks a lot for your nice comment! You are right, it should be "Nektarschmaus" rather then "Honigschmaus"...

I am thinking of making this an actual lyric for a song I am writing :)

Thanks again!

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05 May 2016

How bright a candle of kindness
can shine in the dark and help to find
the treasure in your mind
And give you the spark of pleasure.

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03 Jun 2016

Social network OCD
trapping me and I can't flee
I am stuck in robot mode
Brain is taking too much load

OMG I can't connect
Down the drain, my intellect
Reset the router didn't work
My mode is changing to berserk

I smashed my router in one hit
I robot will not take no shit
My precious phone, flushed down the loo
and Macbook Pro went down there too

My house on fire, all is gone
I'm lying crying on my lawn
And then my lawn mower says Hi!
Surprised I kiss my legs goodbye

I have no legs and brain is dead
No internet led to bloodshed
I'm in a tunnel, there's a light
but something doesn't feel quite right

I kneel before the Facebook God
and pray for thousands megabaud
I slayed my social network gear
and sinners do not end up here

I find myself in E-mail hell
where Notes God and his servants dwell
Nothing here makes sense at all
and I am in a constant fall.

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04 Jun 2016

Roses are red
Violets are blue
Get ALL THE compressors,
So you can glue.

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